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20 Sep 2003, 23:41
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fascinated by bridges!
Join Date: Jul 2000
Location: Norwegiensis
Posts: 919
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And it's a song by me!
I'm writing a song for all of you tonight.
The lyric is like this:
Please come back
I need you
You left me
but I think you love me
[refrain]
Why did you leave me
I loved you so
It used to be just me and you
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When did you leave
It's so hard to remember
I never stopped loving you
We were together
Why did you leave me
I loved you so
It used to be just me and you
Why did I leave you
You were the one
The one who was there for me
When I needed you for something
Why did you leave me
I loved you so
It used to be just me and you
So many nights I've been awake
Thinking about the things you said
What did you say
I can't remember
Why did you leave me
I loved you so
It used to be just me and you
Whenever I see you
On the other side of the street
You tell me
Let's not meet
Why did you leave me
I loved you so
It used to be just me and you
[Bonus stanza with regards to MM]
Baby I want you to know!
I never stopped looking through your bathroom window
When you thought nobody was there
It's true
[Extra corporate whore edition stanza]
And baby one more thing
I know you didn't want it
You know that's why I never gave it
But here goes nothing:
Now, finally
I give you
My
Respect
It's pretty don't you think?
Matrim
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Holy smoke.
Last edited by Matrim; 22 Sep 2003 at 18:38.
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21 Sep 2003, 00:06
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Cute and cuddly
Join Date: Jul 2002
Location: New York
Posts: 1,891
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i think it ****ing sucks!
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"You're a ****ing ugly bitch. I want to stab you to death, and then play around with your blood."
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21 Sep 2003, 00:13
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First Disciple of Aldur
Join Date: Jul 2000
Location: The Vale of Aldur
Posts: 1,470
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It needs more work.
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Yeah.
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21 Sep 2003, 00:34
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Cute and cuddly
Join Date: Jul 2002
Location: New York
Posts: 1,891
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Quote:
Originally posted by Flavius
I read it over the phone to a female friend of mine.
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we all know you were on the phone to your mum, you're just trying to be ambiguous
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"You're a ****ing ugly bitch. I want to stab you to death, and then play around with your blood."
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21 Sep 2003, 00:35
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fascinated by bridges!
Join Date: Jul 2000
Location: Norwegiensis
Posts: 919
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Quote:
Originally posted by Flavius
I read it over the phone to a female friend of mine.
She giggled
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Looks as I'm finally reaching fame.
I had a special feeling about this song when I wrote it; I knew it was going to be a hit.
Thank you all for your support, I wouldn't be here if it weren't for you.
Matrim
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Holy smoke.
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21 Sep 2003, 09:34
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Rawr rawr
Join Date: Dec 2000
Location: Upside down
Posts: 5,300
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Quote:
Originally posted by Flavius
I read it over the phone to a female friend of mine.
She giggled
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wait wait... so you read a song you found on GD, to a real-life girl?
I don't know who to be worried about more... you or Matrim
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21 Sep 2003, 09:37
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a little bit broken
Join Date: Jun 2003
Posts: 1,405
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its a bit silly
but i write bad poety when i am drunk so i shouldnt really say anything
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21 Sep 2003, 20:44
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Little Bitch
Join Date: Jun 2001
Location: Location Location!
Posts: 771
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bloomers' rap is the best.
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Well I'd love to stay and talk, but you're a total bitch.
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21 Sep 2003, 20:44
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J to the C to the A G E
Join Date: Sep 2000
Location: Scúnthorpe
Posts: 5,583
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Go Matrim go!
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21 Sep 2003, 20:49
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Checkout Boy
Join Date: Jun 2002
Posts: 622
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Quote:
Originally posted by poshphil
bloomers' rap is the best.
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why arent you on irc?
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David Dickinson says:
you're desperate in virtually every aspect of your life
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21 Sep 2003, 20:54
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Little Bitch
Join Date: Jun 2001
Location: Location Location!
Posts: 771
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Quote:
Originally posted by Tobe
why arent you on irc?
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because i haven't got round to downloading it yet.
2 minutes.
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Well I'd love to stay and talk, but you're a total bitch.
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21 Sep 2003, 21:28
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Sheep Lover
Join Date: Sep 2002
Posts: 72
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Re: my song
Quote:
Originally posted by Vermillian Jnr
...im bringin my thing outta the aussie rap scene...
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That made me laugh
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21 Sep 2003, 23:41
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:alpha:
Join Date: May 2002
Location: London, UK
Posts: 7,871
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Quote:
Originally posted by Structural Integrity
real-life girl
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YES. WITH REAL ASL AND EVERYTHING.
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"There is no I in team, but there are two in anal fisting"
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22 Sep 2003, 13:06
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Gone
Join Date: Jan 2001
Posts: 14,656
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You never used the phrase 'Baby I want you to know' once, so it's going to be a flop.
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22 Sep 2003, 17:51
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fascinated by bridges!
Join Date: Jul 2000
Location: Norwegiensis
Posts: 919
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I tried the best I could to implement all the necessary components, but I have been made aware that one of these is missing.
I will now edit my song and make it the hit I deserve.
Matrim
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Holy smoke.
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22 Sep 2003, 18:22
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Rawr rawr
Join Date: Dec 2000
Location: Upside down
Posts: 5,300
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Quote:
Originally posted by Matrim
I tried the best I could to implement all the necessary components, but I have been made aware that one of these is missing.
I will now edit my song and make it the hit I deserve.
Matrim
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You forgot one more thing...
You remember those songs by those skin-coloured playaz with l33t rappaz skill0rz? Well, they score hits, and they are always talking about " teh respect for tha woman". You really should include " respect" for this to become a hit!
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22 Sep 2003, 18:49
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fascinated by bridges!
Join Date: Jul 2000
Location: Norwegiensis
Posts: 919
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Quote:
Originally posted by Structural Integrity
You forgot one more thing...
You remember those songs by those skin-coloured playaz with l33t rappaz skill0rz? Well, they score hits, and they are always talking about "teh respect for tha woman". You really should include "respect" for this to become a hit!
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Done. Though now I'm afraid I cannot do any more adjustments to my song. I don't want it to completely lose touch with its roots.
Matrim
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